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I wrote a poem guys

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Bright eyes33 Bright eyes33 NSW Posts: 64
1 17 Aug 2012
Meat 1# by cameron H

The selfish act.
The thought swiftly killed.
Your parents said its in our nature.
So you do it too.
The blood in their veins.
Is now blood in yours.
The soul they were given.
Now lost to your fork.
Pain never ending.
Never seen by us.
Gates like auschwitz.
To keep cries shut.
I try to tell you.
About the cancer in my heart.
But opinions like razorblades.
Cut my voice apart...

4_da_animals1 4_da_animals1 SA Posts: 3293
2 17 Aug 2012
Really like it, it's thought provoking, and it triggers nerves in my heart, really powerful Cam! Well done! Keep it up! happy
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Bright eyes33 Bright eyes33 NSW Posts: 64
3 17 Aug 2012
its kinda lame i wish i could write cryptic deep songs and poems but all about practice right.
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Miss. Jones Miss. Jones VIC Posts: 242
4 17 Aug 2012
WOW! You are so in tune ... happy love

I would love to share this on FB but naturally with you as the author.  Is this acceptable to you?  I understand if it is not.

I had tingles down my spine.
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my friends have feathers my friends have feathers NSW Posts: 20
5 17 Aug 2012
I like it, the more I read it the more I hear
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Vegan all the way Vegan all the way WA Posts: 44
6 17 Aug 2012
You are so talented, Cameron.

I believe this poem resonates with every vegan's heart!
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-- -- NSW Posts: 83
7 17 Aug 2012
awesome xx
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Debaybay Debaybay QLD Posts: 39
8 17 Aug 2012
*like*
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Bright eyes33 Bright eyes33 NSW Posts: 64
9 17 Aug 2012
thanks alot guys.
yeah do whatever you want im glad you liked it
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Kelsey1 MsDrago Kelsey1 MsDrago United States Posts: 818
10 18 Aug 2012
clap clap clap
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